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  1. LordMcCoveyCove on Chapter 1 Wed 14 Aug 2024 11:21PM UTC

    The County of McCovey Cove

    When I read this on the email notification, I laughed out loud seeing the first word. Kelley seems like a hard-luck character, but I think you'll find as we move through the introductory arc (first three chapters) that she takes control of things pretty handily. I think also that her upbringing traumatized her to not put up with any bullshit from anyone for anything. She'll play by the rules for the most part, but over time, those who work closely with her will come to find that she's made of tougher stuff and she's not your typical marine.

    As for the training montage, my plan for this series is that we will see her in some kind of training; I just didn't want to spend too much time on her at MCRD training. There is a method to my madness, and it will be made clear later on in this story about her traits and strengths through the action of the plot (I hope). Also, it keeps that basic training portion of her life available to write shorts about.

    Thanks for reading, Kev. Appreciate your insightful comments, as always! :)

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    1. MirandaFave on Chapter 1 Thu 15 Aug 2024 12:50PM UTC

      I should point out that I don't view Kelley as a hard luck character. That agency you speak of, is there in all the characterisation of her. With even the Klingon fight and how it all pans out, she keeps focus and control, seeking to impose her self-control on the situation, avoiding conflict if she can, making wise choices rather than reacting rashly.

      I have faith in your madness! I look forward to how you will continue things.

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