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1. Beatrice_Otter Sun 16 Jul 2023 01:11AM UTC

   

   Ooooh, this one is so sad and kinda creepy. The way they forget what happened to which person! It's really effective, the way you establish at the beginning that they're different people--the way Tom is off on his estimates of how long it will take Will to break down.

   Also: I'm assuming that "Conjoined" is a sequel to this story? If so, it might take me a bit of time to recover before I can come back to it. You might consider making the two stories into a series, so there's a link from one to the other. (the software will do that automatically if you create a series and make the two stories part of it.)

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2. 1. jamaharon Sun 16 Jul 2023 01:20AM UTC

      

      Oh, you're right! I just fixed it. There should be a link now.

      And yes god, by all means, take a breather between those two XD

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